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I've got fetusfingers, all pomegranate and peach
With little eyes of carved bone.

Someone placed a ribbon across the brim
A wallpaper sky, rose doré stained

Trees stretch up to bursting, bleed turquoise
Slow growing lichen in a vacuum.

Scene exit with dark roads.
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2nd poem in A Poem A Day.

I was driving back up the Pacific Coast Highway and it looked like Ireland, all pink sky and blue water and sunlight shining straight through my hands. They were blurry that close to my eyes and made me think of those weird old snapshots of fetuses where the eyes are just dark specks like fish eyes.
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=Aconitum-Napellus Jan 3, 2013  Professional Writer
I love the way your art training is coming through in this - like with the 'rose dore'. What a conflation of images - the foetusfingers (I have to put the oe in ;-) ) and bone eyes either side of the softness of pomegranate and peach. Makes me think of the infantilisation of pregnant women and the softness of babies after birth, against the odd, harsh images in an ultrasound. I see your fingers clenched and bony, clutching on nothing, while the car takes you past painted scenes.

Forgive my rambling. I am tipsy. :D
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~Alois-Noette Jan 3, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
shh I'm tipsy too but probably not on the same stuff XD

I sort of visualize watercoloring what I'm seeing way too much, hence colors doing weird things

yeah, I didn't even think of ultrasounds...damn.
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=Aconitum-Napellus Jan 3, 2013  Professional Writer
Fluidity of meaning. Ultrasounds, foetuses... (I read it as 'festusfinger' when I saw it first on Tumblr, and thought you'd been watching Gunsmoke ;-) )

No longer tipsy - just sleepy.

You need more foetuses in your poetry. And watercolour. And obscurity.
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~Alois-Noette Jan 3, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Creepy things yep will do indeed
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=schongslipper Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is really beautiful, but I can't tell what it's about. You may want to focus your imagery on a central point; right now it'd a little hard to understand the setting. Good foundation, though!
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~Alois-Noette Jan 3, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I tend to go for a more general cohesion than specific, so that's fine.
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=schongslipper Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Great job then =]
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